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PostSubject: rap- deaming   February 26th 2010, 8:00 am

so what are your dreams and desires
your flaws and vunrabilities
do you love me asking you questions
and do u love responcibilities

and how do you stand to live
in a world with nothing to give
and when you know all of this
this could just be a dream, a life with no bliss
cos i am no expert i not at all novice
but i understand responcibility
and i have nothing else to give
but then i look up and see it
this shooting star so i make myself a wish

and when i wake up in the mourning will u be there for me
and when i do somthing amazing will u be there to see
and how can i count on somone i dont even trust to be
there to pick me up when i fall and to set me free

cos when i think, and when i fall
and when theres hope, and when i saw
when i saw u standing there
and i looked and stared in awe
and everyday i have to look and ask myself
how do i deserve you in anyway at all
but i dont question fate, i see it as a blessing
and so i am satisfied so i do not ask for more

so one morning i woke up and i looked outside
i saw a miracle a beutiful site
i thought i must be dreaming or living another life
but then i realized it was just mine
so i see this blessing a sight for sore eyes

i just look down and ask myself why
how could i have done it i flt like i cud fly
but then i remmbered and i started to cry
i felt bad for all the poor people without my life
i felt sorry for all the people struggling to get by
i remember my childhood and now this all feels like a lie
i need some help i dont want noone else to die

so i decided in my stupid life
i would go out there and
at least do one thing rite
i looked down in shame
and i felt like shite
so i realised i have to go
and search to shed some light
and i had to remember everything
to make it all rigt
when nobody undrstood me
and i always had to lie
and how i was i saved
before i took my own life
and i knelt down and prayed
and i did it all night
then when morning came
i realized its all gunna be alrite
and that made me smile
and no longer feel like shite
i was emotion filled
and i started to cry
tears of happiness and joy
pouring out helping finish my
and i hope u are happy
as you no longer need to cry
as its all in his hand
and it will be sorted out tonigt
so please dont worry and go to sleep
and wait for morning there will be light

cos when i think, and when i fall
and when theres hope, and when i saw
when i saw u standing there
and i looked and stared in awe
and everyday i have to look and ask myself
how do i deserve you in anyway at all
but i dont question fate, i see it as a blessing
and so i am satisfied so i do not ask for more

and so now im looking bak
and i ask myself why
why i was so cursed
and lead a bad life
and how did it all change
when did it all go right
i ask myself how
how did i survive every night
when did all the goodness
come within my sights
how did i still smile
when i felt like shite
while i was sufering
i still learnt to fight
and there i was scared
my face was going white
i was looking in his eyes
and i feared for my life
i was only about ten years old
i couldnt get to sleep that night
and the pain it sored
the devil he smiled
he was happy with me suffering
but then it all went wiled
and i managed to escape
the nightmare holdin on
i managed to be free
all the evil seemed gone
and as he bit and he bit
and he stayed for so long
the devil he left
because we all knew we won
and with that smile
and with the mighty one
we survived
and joined with his mighty son
and there we saw the peace
and we had been fightng for so long
but now we manage to end it
and all of the crap seemed gone
and we were free to live our lives
as we pleased, and the light it shone
in upon our lives forever more and as we all saw
he was there watching over us

cos when i think, and when i fall
and when theres hope, and when i saw
when i saw u standing there
and i looked and stared in awe
and everyday i have to look and ask myself
how do i deserve you in anyway at all
but i dont question fate, i see it as a blessing
and so i am satisfied so i do not ask for more

and now i try to help them all
no matter there problems
no matter how big or small
i feel its my duty as
to catch them everytime they fall
and when it happens i smile
and i try to help more
i took over the charity
and i triedd to help them all
and when i saw him that lil boy
all scared and all alone for
i went over and spoke with him
and now he smiles and is happy more
and that feeling is amazing its lifting me up
i think its what god made me for
to help all thos people that cannot help themselves
and to some but not me its a chore
but there is nothing more fulfilling
then to know ur helpin some human soul
to lead beter lives and for them to help others
and to do it more and more
and the parable of the sheep and goats
and to know ur helping forever more

and then one second it will stop forever more
and you will look around to see
that every child that you helped them all
and you will be happy to know
there is much les crime and gore
and the hooligans are off the streets
and you now that they are all following the law
ad to know yo have done right
in you short lived life
and to know that everybody
is now going to be alrite


cos when i think, and when i fall
and when theres hope, and when i saw
when i saw u standing there
and i looked and stared in awe
and everyday i have to look and ask myself
how do i deserve you in anyway at all
but i dont question fate, i see it as a blessing
and so i am satisfied so i do not ask for more.
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PostSubject: Re: rap- deaming   February 26th 2010, 2:44 pm

I really like it. There are some grammar mistakes in it, but since it's a rap I'm not sure if you intended on doing them or if they just happened.

Do you just write lyrics or do you actually rap them too by making a video or something like that?

But like I said, you get to the point of what you have to say and you don't care what everyone says.

Nice job!

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PostSubject: Re: rap- deaming   February 26th 2010, 7:02 pm

thanks, yer i rap them but i dont have videos...

but yer that is my cleanest, swearing-wise song i wrote, if you dont mind i have another recent song on this pc but it has swearing...
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