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Registration date: 2010-02-26

PostSubject: breaking out-rap   February 26th 2010, 6:06 pm

beyond the beauty and the fearsome
the king and his god
beneath the sky and the ground
her rosy red blood
this is a murder case
a losing race
a one in a million chance
this is the day before the yestoday
when she might've killed in france
upon the tower
and the building
and the lost and the found

yo a lock without its key
to a door without a handle
in the palrimentry buildings
lit up with the wax candle
in the tower or confewssion
i have a lot on my chest
found upon the ground
a map to the northern west
oh yo a freedom fighting pilot
found dead in the ground
a cross on his arm
and his hand was never found
this was a momentary silence
in the contemplation of the dead
burried in the ground
it all just gets inside yo head
this was a couple of a million
and a thousand and two
a chance to solve the riddle
the riddle of the few
a hidden agenda shaping all that there is
and long life leader creating this quiz
oohh

this was the butter knife
stabbed in my life
i need to get this rite
i need some help im scared of heights
yet i really wana fly
holding up the line
to commit the crime
and destroy the time
to what i believe is mine
i dont wanna hear you wine
oooh

and this was the butter knife
stabbed in my life
i need to get this rite
i need some help im scared of heights
yet i really wana fly
doing time
i never cryed
i never lived
and i never died
oh

in trouble for the day when i never ever lied
agian i sit inside the tub drowning my sorrows
looking to see weathereb the guy he ussually follows
this is the mureder case
a losing race
a heart beat to the gone
ive been sitting here waiting for way to long
this is the final day
the gangstas rap
the hopful glint
i'd never rat
belive me brother
on my own mother
i wont die
please dont cry
if i fly

oooh my angel
her wings as white
snowflakes
they look like shite
a hopeful day
to have my say
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
ooh yer my angel
you are my angel
a last look at my cell
im running of the edge
hoping to sell
i wont fall down
im learning to fly
meat up with you angel
even if i die
please dont cry
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
one waaay

this was the parliment
the goverment
the priminster
the president
the company
she owes me
alot of love
oh baby
in tonight
oh the light
shining in on the crime
alot of screams
alot of wines
alot of current
in my dreams
in the nightmare
before dead
before the life
before the lies
before the days
befoer nights
before the wings
learnt how to spread
befoer the angel
learnt to fly
before the creation
of your life
in the heavons
beyond the grave
beyond the shovel
beyond the days
a spirit
and a soul
and i sold it all
before the days
before the one
before the god
before the cross
olot of loss
alot of love
alot of service
alot of ooh
ooh

oooh my angel
her wings as white
snowflakes
they look like shite
a hopeful day
to have my say
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
ooh yer my angel
you are my angel
a last look at my cell
im running of the edge
hoping to sell
i wont fall down
im learning to fly
meat up with you angel
even if i die
please dont cry
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
one waaay

and the days before the gone
and there gone before you come
and the thought of losing love
and the love of losing out
and the hope to reach my destination
never give it up
get over those walls
until death oh do it now
i nead some help
im in some trouble
need some lovin on the double
not giving up onto you
not gunna trade the love of few
give me my money
give me my gun
give me my life
or has it all gone
i think ive met the final day
my final say
my final chance
my final love
my final oone
oh

oooh my angel
her wings as white
snowflakes
they look like shite
a hopeful day
to have my say
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
ooh yer my angel
you are my angel
a last look at my cell
im running of the edge
hoping to sell
i wont fall down
im learning to fly
meat up with you angel
even if i die
please dont cry
im breaking out of jail
todaaaaaaay
one waaay
one way oh one way oh yeer
oooh one way
oh one way
im breaking out of jaiil toodaay
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