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PostSubject: Inferno   September 9th 2008, 6:59 am

The sentences in the italics are whispered, not sung.
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Scatter the daemons
There's a new world coming
Hold the sunlight
The moon shall bruise the skies

A new world order has
Come to life
Murders, anguish
Have caused this strife

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world

The pain is eternal. Like a conflagration. Giving me some pacification...

Improvise your own destiny
My tears are my necklace
My darling
You would never understand

A new era is born
Tonight
Your lies and hate
Have dimmed the light

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world

A sound so shallow. You barely heard the rasp. The tripping hour is long past...

Time's a murmur
I can never grasp
The black hole of denial
Has lasted too long

A new me is been created
From dust and heat
Emptiness
Has brought this feat

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world
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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   September 25th 2008, 1:14 am

You have a wonderful way with words. I enjoyed the song, even though the mood is a bit depressing, leaving me thinking about things I'd rather not. I'm reading it as a rock - punk piece, is this your intention?

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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   September 25th 2008, 5:08 am

Thanks for the reply Kellycakes. ^^ Yes, I intended it to be punk-rock. That's not my usual genre as I write optimistic lyrics, but I randomly got thinking about dark themes and there it came down on the computer theme.
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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   September 25th 2008, 10:14 am

Nice! Yup, I could imagine some grungy, dirt-laden guitar going on in the background with a pounding rhythm and some dude with a sinister voice doing the lyrics....this actually reminds me a bit of Opeth.

On the other hand, if I was given the song, I'd probably cast it in a minor key with a classical or acoustic guitar at first, and then kinda fill it up later with a nice tasty melodic solo....but that's just my style.

But yeah, great song! I should really give songwriting an honest try...
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