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PostSubject: Make Me Feel Sad Like You   September 10th 2008, 3:56 pm

Why do you always have to
Make me feel sad like you
You look it but you might not feel it
Worn-down eyes and a non-existent smile
Maybe a broken heart-I wish I could steal it
I see the way you talk to somebody and everybody and nobody at all
Why do you always have to
(Every single time I see you)
Make my already fragile heart flutter
And if I ever talked to you
My voice would give way to a stutter
Why do I always find me
Looking at you
So fleeting and yet so casually
A blink of an eye and then no one can accuse me of anything
I haven't been stalking you just staring
Why do I always find me
Thinking about you for everything
Random thoughts about you make me smile
Whenever I'm upset or my mind's wandering
I think about you for awhile
Why do the things that
I wish for hardly ever come true
I guess that what I'm really trying to say is that I think I like you
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PostSubject: Re: Make Me Feel Sad Like You   September 10th 2008, 4:12 pm

Its very sweet. The first two lines are great; the next three work but are a bit unbalanced. The rhyming is on and off.

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PostSubject: Re: Make Me Feel Sad Like You   September 24th 2008, 5:17 pm

i'll just give recommendations here and there
Quote :

Why do you always have to
Make me feel sad like you
You look it but you might not feel it
Worn-down eyes and a non-existent smile
Maybe a broken heart-I wish I could steal it
I see the way you talk to somebody and everybody and nobody at all
(i liked this part the opposites make for a nice image)
Why do you always have to
(Every single time I see you)
Make my already fragile heart flutter
And if I ever talked to you
My voice would give way to a stutter
Why do I always find me
(not sure if this is grammatically correct but it sounds a bit off to m, but i did eventually overlook it due to the fact that there is a repetition later
Looking at you
So fleeting and yet so casually
A blink of an eye and then no one can accuse me of anything
I haven't been stalking you just staring
Why do I always find me
Thinking about you for everything
Random thoughts about you make me smile
Whenever I'm upset or my mind's wandering
I think about you for awhile
Why do the things that
I wish for hardly ever come true
I guess that what I'm really trying to say is that I think I like you

i agree with kellycakes and find this to be a cute poem and i agree about the rhyming. the end made me smile a bit.
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