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PostSubject: Just Open Your Eyes   January 16th 2009, 12:56 pm

Metal song, people don't tell me these are typical lyrics for a metal song. But I think they are okay. I think. I listen to a lot of Slipknot and sometimes their lyrics aren't typical metal.

Just Open Your Eyes

You are so ridiculous
You think you can shun life
You think you are safe hiding
alone in that room of yours
hiding children from what is out
there, what is inside you is
far more worse

^chorus^
Just open your eyes
and look at the ideas flowing
around you
Stop shunning life and just start living
Because you can't stop the world from spinning
^chorus end^

You think that you can control
what he can see, but the truth
is if you don't stay with him everywhere
he will see it no matter how much
control you put on him
you think you can control
what hears, but if you don't
place plugs in his ears then
he'll hear it no matter what

^chorus repeat^
^chorus end^


You think that your silly
religion will protect you
but look around it hasn't
protected anyone in years
you think that by placing
the restrictions on him
that he'll be happy, but
you don't let him grow and become
the man he wants to be he'll
turned out to be the man
you want him to be
he'll have no thoughts of
his own he'll just live an assimilated
world
Just like, just like you

^chorus repeat^
^chorus end^

You gotta stop living
in an echo bubble because
the world just doesn't work
that way, the world just doesn't work
that way
People are people even if they
were born from you
they deserve their own thoughts and
their own reasons, not your thoughts
and not your reasons...his reasons and his
thoughts

What would happen if he lost you?
Do you think that what you have done to him?
Would help accept the fact that the world
just doesn't work the way you explained
to him
Do you think he would be able to truly live?
Do you think he is happy now?
Or do you think that maybe you should
open your eyes and look and the world outside
of that bubble?
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PostSubject: Re: Just Open Your Eyes   January 17th 2009, 1:31 am

The problem with this, is that it is full sentence not split second ideas, which make it hard for it to be a good metal song. Like speaking to music more then singing.

Not bad for a metal song however.

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PostSubject: Re: Just Open Your Eyes   January 17th 2009, 4:26 am

Well it's a new kind of metal.
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Thank you Urs, I'm just having a bits of fun with the new kind of metal.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Open Your Eyes   January 17th 2009, 2:14 pm

Seems fair enough to me.

I am old school in the heavy metal era, never even heard of... well I have heard OF Slipknot, but I have not listened to their music.

So if you say this is what modern metal is like, then it works for me.

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PostSubject: Re: Just Open Your Eyes   January 17th 2009, 10:19 pm

Well only a few Slipknot songs are like that.
Not a lot.
A lot of them are just quick yelling small segments out.


But this is Leaka modern metal.
I like reinventing stuff. Wink
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