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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

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Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Under The Sun...   July 19th 2008, 12:11 am

This is the first poem created by Kellycakes & Snacker in the 'Ongoing Collaboration' post. What do you think?

I feel the sea breeze
Going through my hair
While I'm down on my knees
With you my feelings I share

I sit and stare
Into your beautiful eyes
Nothing but love
To me it wasn't a surprise

I never would have thought
To love someone so much
But what heaven has me brought
Is an angel with sensational touch

An angel I'm not
I do understand your feelings
Whenever we meet at this beautiful spot
Your love always leaves me reeling

The connection between us
Is beyond everything we're wishing for
Each others hearts we possess
Never again alone anymore

I like the sound of forever.
But is this a dream or real?
Will we always be together?
Or will it fade how we feel?

What we feel in our hearts
Can not be denied
Here and now is where it starts
And soon we'll be groom and bride

That is a sweet thought
And if what you say is true
You will be my husband, I your wife
And in God's eyes we'll say I do!

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PostSubject: Re: Under The Sun...   July 22nd 2008, 3:56 pm

I love it ...Nice creation you too.....

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PostSubject: Re: Under The Sun...   September 24th 2008, 5:34 pm

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An angel I'm not
I do understand your feelings
Whenever we meet at this beautiful spot
Your love always leaves me reeling
I really loved this part

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I like the sound of forever.
But is this a dream or real?
Will we always be together?
Or will it fade how we feel?
This is where the poem hit ho,e for me. The image of time fading your feelings was fantastic!

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That is a sweet thought
And if what you say is true
You will be my husband, I your wife
And in God's eyes we'll say I do!
the ending was nice edspecially the husband and wife getting married thing!

overall this is a really good poem with some great imagery and good expression.
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