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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

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When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: I need a kick up the ass please   July 1st 2009, 8:02 pm

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PostSubject: Reply   July 1st 2009, 10:09 pm

I believe that you got what you were attempting. You managed a good moody introduction to your character. There is not anything really happening, but I fully support taking the time to establish character and story.

Let me simply remind you that you are not going through your manuscript only once. Not only do you improve in editing as you work through your document, but you get a firmer understanding of pacing and character. Thus, call this section passable, then see how it looks to you on the next round of editing.

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PostSubject: Re: I need a kick up the ass please   July 2nd 2009, 5:29 am

Thank you.

I intend to go through it all a few times probs. The chapter that follows will probably be just as short, but mostly dialogue.

I consider my book to be a fairly long one, and the prologue set the scene for a battle at the village, so I don't see the need to rush straight into it. There's a possible 6 chapters worth of bits in between where I can attempt to develop the characters before hand, and hopefully, as the point of such ideas are, get people to care about them.

Then enjoy a bloody massacre. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: I need a kick up the ass please   July 2nd 2009, 6:10 pm

The phrasing is good, the word use is solid and beyond a few very minor SP&G issues this looks fine.

However, I am not sure what to make of this. As Trish said, nothing actually happens in this chapter even if there are a lot of happenings.
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PostSubject: Re: I need a kick up the ass please   July 2nd 2009, 10:09 pm

Hmm, I'll have to have a think about it, my minds blank at the moment. I'll have to throw a scene in there or something. I took a part out of her trying to use casting to light an oil lamp and it goes horribly wrong. I think i could sneak that in near the end. Idea
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PostSubject: Re: I need a kick up the ass please   July 3rd 2009, 11:09 am

Okay, I added the dream sequence at the beginning of the chapter again. Let me know what you think Very Happy
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PostSubject: Reply   July 3rd 2009, 12:21 pm

It does seem clearer and intense. I would almost call this a hook. Keep at it.

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